The invisible lady

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  1. Beki

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    See the lady sitting there
    All day long she sits and stares
    Sadness lurks inside her eyes
    As everybody wanders by

    No one knows the life she's led
    Or even if she has a bed...
    A home to go to when she's done
    I'm sure she's not the only one

    A man walks by and gives a smile
    Makes her happy for a while
    She really doesn't ask for much
    A smile, a hand, a human touch

    The night draws in, she drifts away
    She knows no longer can she stay
    Tomorrow she'll be back again
    To try and ease her inner pain
     
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    Very good poem Beki, did you write it?

    Love Mini xxx
     
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    thanks mini :) x

    yes, i wrote it this evening.. in fact, this post is the only copy i have! :eek:
     
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    Thanks for sharing this .... more?
     
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    Fab poem, nice metre n rhythm, the half-rhyme at the end really reflects the tone of the poem with things being sad n slightly not right.
    I especially love the second stanza. Poignant stuff :)
     
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