clairex
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Hi everyone - wondering if you would be able to give me a hand. I am writing my personal statement for a Primary Education degree, wondering if you could have a read (its not very long) and tell me what you think? Any spelling/punctuation errors, or anything you think sounds wrong. All criticism greatfully recieved! And of course, what you think in general of it. I know its very cheesy, I found it really hard to write about myself!!! There is a 47 line limit which I have used up.
Thank you in advance. Hope you all have a lovely christmas and new year xxxxxxxxxxxxx
The prospect of studying Primary Education is massively exciting to me. While preparing to write this personal statement I have found it immensely difficult to put into words how passionate I am, and how much I simply cannot imagine doing anything else. To be able to inspire children, to ensure that they look forward to coming into school, to find ways of teaching the curriculum that is both exciting and illuminating; are all things that I aspire to.
I am a friendly, happy person who enjoys life. I work incredibly hard, and thrive when challenged. As I have taken some time out from academia; I am mature, and ready to commit fully to this degree. Working within a Doctors practice has helped me gain some invaluable skills. For example, I have learned how to be compassionate yet still maintain a professional manner. This was demonstrated when dealing with a family where substance abuse was an issue. I had to deal with the family, the Doctor and social services. I could not give any information to the family, maintain confidentiality whilst understanding the awful position the family was in. Also, I am in charge of the chronic disease registers within the practice, and this has taught me how to time manage my work, and remain organised.
My first solid experience within a Primary school was 2004 where, through school, I expressed a passion to work with children. I gained a placement at a local Catholic Primary School, and enjoyed two weeks of working with all different ages. Here laid the foundations for my craving to want to teach. I had the opportunity to work one-on-one with pupils, as well as taking my own groups aside and aiding them in the work the class teacher had set. I learned here that I found it easy to create a rapport with the pupils, and that I had a natural flare for supporting the pupils in their work.
Currently I have a placement in another local primary school, which I fit in around my job. I have learned so much. There are a few pupils who I work with frequently as they have attention disorders. It is difficult to keep them on task, but I enjoy the challenge of changing the way of looking at the work to suit them. For example, the children were asked to write a letter to the Prime Minister on how they would improve the world. I took a small group of 4 boys who find it difficult to concentrate. In order to keep them interested, we had a discussion between us about what they thought was wrong or unfair in the world. They came up with some outstanding answers such as starvation in the third world, hunting animals, and also people dropping litter. I wrote these on the board and drew pictures next to them to represent each point. We all then worked together to put each point into full sentences, ensuring each child helped to create the sentences. Their class teacher was delighted with what I managed to come up with, as these pupils were challenging, and one of my group was selected to put theirs on the wall, which elated the child. I am confident this placement has provided relevant, practical experience that will aid me in the course; helping to enhance my written work and further placements in other schools.
My interests can also help me in this course. Reading is an important pass time for me, I enjoy both fiction and non-fiction. I hope to pass this love of reading on to pupils, and hope they feel inspired to read, too. I also enjoy computing. Being able to use a computer in an efficient manner is vital in modern society. I enjoy computing, and as technology becomes more and more prevalent; this is very important for future teachers. I also enjoy being social and spending time with my friends and family, various music genres, and travelling.
Primary teaching is all I have ever wanted to do. The only way I can describe the feeling when I am teaching, is that it feels very 'right'. I would be an asset to this course, and am looking forward to working incredibly hard to achieve the best degree I can, in order to become the best teacher I can.
Thank you in advance. Hope you all have a lovely christmas and new year xxxxxxxxxxxxx
The prospect of studying Primary Education is massively exciting to me. While preparing to write this personal statement I have found it immensely difficult to put into words how passionate I am, and how much I simply cannot imagine doing anything else. To be able to inspire children, to ensure that they look forward to coming into school, to find ways of teaching the curriculum that is both exciting and illuminating; are all things that I aspire to.
I am a friendly, happy person who enjoys life. I work incredibly hard, and thrive when challenged. As I have taken some time out from academia; I am mature, and ready to commit fully to this degree. Working within a Doctors practice has helped me gain some invaluable skills. For example, I have learned how to be compassionate yet still maintain a professional manner. This was demonstrated when dealing with a family where substance abuse was an issue. I had to deal with the family, the Doctor and social services. I could not give any information to the family, maintain confidentiality whilst understanding the awful position the family was in. Also, I am in charge of the chronic disease registers within the practice, and this has taught me how to time manage my work, and remain organised.
My first solid experience within a Primary school was 2004 where, through school, I expressed a passion to work with children. I gained a placement at a local Catholic Primary School, and enjoyed two weeks of working with all different ages. Here laid the foundations for my craving to want to teach. I had the opportunity to work one-on-one with pupils, as well as taking my own groups aside and aiding them in the work the class teacher had set. I learned here that I found it easy to create a rapport with the pupils, and that I had a natural flare for supporting the pupils in their work.
Currently I have a placement in another local primary school, which I fit in around my job. I have learned so much. There are a few pupils who I work with frequently as they have attention disorders. It is difficult to keep them on task, but I enjoy the challenge of changing the way of looking at the work to suit them. For example, the children were asked to write a letter to the Prime Minister on how they would improve the world. I took a small group of 4 boys who find it difficult to concentrate. In order to keep them interested, we had a discussion between us about what they thought was wrong or unfair in the world. They came up with some outstanding answers such as starvation in the third world, hunting animals, and also people dropping litter. I wrote these on the board and drew pictures next to them to represent each point. We all then worked together to put each point into full sentences, ensuring each child helped to create the sentences. Their class teacher was delighted with what I managed to come up with, as these pupils were challenging, and one of my group was selected to put theirs on the wall, which elated the child. I am confident this placement has provided relevant, practical experience that will aid me in the course; helping to enhance my written work and further placements in other schools.
My interests can also help me in this course. Reading is an important pass time for me, I enjoy both fiction and non-fiction. I hope to pass this love of reading on to pupils, and hope they feel inspired to read, too. I also enjoy computing. Being able to use a computer in an efficient manner is vital in modern society. I enjoy computing, and as technology becomes more and more prevalent; this is very important for future teachers. I also enjoy being social and spending time with my friends and family, various music genres, and travelling.
Primary teaching is all I have ever wanted to do. The only way I can describe the feeling when I am teaching, is that it feels very 'right'. I would be an asset to this course, and am looking forward to working incredibly hard to achieve the best degree I can, in order to become the best teacher I can.
good luck on getting in 
